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cast off care like blue
snowfields into rigid water,
and wash with mud the thrust
of earth, our skin soft as salt mines.
built you are
of bitch and buttercream,
of soured elements in the blue
dot of a pin-prick spotlight
and windowed skull.

we can watch the fire fade
into a black rat canvas,
into blue gates that tumble up
and loose finger grooves,
smear eyes across your face like warpaint,
faster and faster,
momentum in the race to nowhere.

and once done, we turn,
we go aground and push
up the lines of blue backs
orbiting the moons of that
rising ass, around corners,
a shattered life in starshine,
the masks
beneath the dream
of every glance.
Based loosely upon the following picture, as per #transliterations prompt 9: [link]

This may not be erotic to anyone but me. Hard to say. I love the picture and it brought out a lot of things deep, beautiful, and bad.
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Given 2011-11-15
blue sluice by *Quemaqua suggester writes: Blue Slice has an understated flavor and portrays a relationship in an intricate way. ( Suggested by angelStained and Featured by BeccaJS )
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
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Keep writing and keep creating.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you much! I continue too appreciate the DLD support. You guys are awesome!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
You are quite welcome! :hug:
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Davidpoet30 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
i really love this its an awesome piece
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks so much, mate. I appreciate that.
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Davidpoet30 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011
no problem i really loved it and i hope you check out mine and you are like emily dickison in your writing keep it up and may i read this at an open mic as long as i credit the author so of course i will need your real name email to me on here please
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011  Professional Writer
My name's no secret around here, I'm Michael J. Riser. You're more than welcome to read the piece if people know who wrote it, and if you direct them on to my website ([link]), so much the better!

Good luck with your writing.
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Davidpoet30 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2011
thanks michael and i will be sure to read it tonight at an open mic i am attending
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
Congrats on the DD, love! :heart:
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you. =)
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Poetrymann Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Congratulations - excellent poem well deserving the honor!
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks, mate. Appreciate all your support.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: Wow. You make the mind wander.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you. I think that's one of the loveliest comments I've ever received.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome! :D
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beeswingblue Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011   Writer
Congrats on the well-deserved DD. It's so good to see you and your writing properly recognized. :heart:
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you... your support means so much.
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks! And you're still the best for what you do, by the way. I suspect you don't get told that nearly often enough.
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
That's very kind of you. :)
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Student Writer
Congratulations on your DD! I love the lushness of this. :heart:
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks so much!
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SockPorn Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Powerful and subtle. Everything poetry should be. I love it!
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you. =) I appreciate that.
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SugarHeartedGirl Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Great! I'm loving the imagery and the whole concept of this! Also, I think you did a good job of connecting it to the painting.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you! I really can't make up my mind about it. I think it still needs work, but hopefully just a little is all it will need.
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SugarHeartedGirl Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I think you can refine it as much as you want, but it's reallyreallyreally good now. :)
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Professional Writer
Well I'm glad you think so. =) Hopefully a publisher will at some point, too!
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here [link]
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Professional Writer
I am humbled. Thank you very much!
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angelStained Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011   Writer
I adore erotic poetry about the earth— it's too rare— and the subtlety you have here among the images.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
eh, there's definitely some erotic imagery in here. starts with 'thrust'--you could make it stronger but I like where it is now.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks. I don't think one needs to overdo it. One just needs to do it until it feels right.

... and see, that sounds far kinkier than anything in the poem.
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angelStained Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011   Writer
:lol:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
it really does. :highfive:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Very interesting words you choose here,
captivating. delightful :heart:
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you, love.
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sixpixel Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
This is so luxuriously creamy and rich, curved and deep, like the paint on the canvas. When I read this I feel a sense of guilty pleasure coming through from the narrator. Very dirty and indulgent. I think this is also another intense love letter to the female anatomy. ;)
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you, love. And that doesn't seem at all like a bad description. I think I've written a lot of those love letters over the years.
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