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like frostfall,
spent necks shouted down
past icicle sheets
around the surfaces of buildings.
those towers rise up in wrath,
grey whales from under earth
that spit waves from the windows
where we sit and watch the world.

flocks drop
like diabetic starlights, space rocks
shaven down to dullness and inedibility,
strung lines of flight held back, bent
and broken
against invisible seas. we will
be pushed by microbes
from mud-bottom graves
that send us all like zombies
into sleep.

the asylum is shut. the city
droops its eyes in daylight. God
takes all things back
through the windows of our behemoths.
ducks and doves and broadbills
hit like raindrops
upon the unforgiven ground.
A little something for the Poetry Screams Prompt Contest. I had fun with this.

For those interested, the prompt was "The Dying Season".

Posted with Sta.sh for the first time. I actually rather like it. It's nice that they included a writer for lit stuff, though I still wish it was just a wee bit more robust. Some simple formatting options would be so wonderful for prose.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011
This is one of my favorite poems of yours yet- very crisp and clear images, a halloween poem that avoids all those annoying halloween cliches. Very well-done, love, good luck in the contest! :heart:
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks. =)
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks!
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011   Writer
I love the elaborate imagery in this and your precision with language, here. And then the stark contrast of God / takes all things back. :wow: Well done.
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Quemaqua Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you. =) The first two lines (well, title and first line) came to me as I was driving toward downtown Fort Worth and my girlfriend's place, and I got this image of birds dying and falling down between the building. Wrote it at her place and polished it up when I got back home.
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